06-26-2004, 06:10 PM | #1 |
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Some spiritual poetry
Hello all. I hadn't heard of this forum until Sister Golden Hair recently pointed it out to me. I love to write--short stories and poetry mostly, though I recently I did, proudly, finish a 77 page fantasy.
Anyway, most of my writings are spiritual, and I thought I'd share some with the forum. Let me know what you think. The first one is called "Among The Flowers", and is about an experience I had somewhat recently, when I was staying at a monastery. One monk by the name of Swami Atmatatwananda went with me to gather flowers for the beautiful gardens in the convent. It was amazing experience, and how I felt there is the subject of this free verse poem: Among The Flowers I saw what few shall ever see In one fleeting life, Wherein eyes are shut And the noise of the future Ever resounds, Cracking value, Consuming the small. I saw there little children of God, And upon their delicate forms Were tied wondrous names That chanted harmoniously: Chrysanthemum, chrysanthemum, And the monk who was near Heard their glorious voices And shivered with joy As he pointed towards the truth, "Listen" he seemed to say, And then I heard it too, But now a symphony of marvels Played, caressing my heart That beat to that holy name: Chrysanthemum, chrysanthemum. This next one is called "Can you hear me?", and like most of my poetry is also free-verse. To me it takes place from the perspective of one idea of God. Can you hear me? Can you hear me? I am murmuring soundless solace Out into the darkness, Where the discord plays, Loud and cold. Will you not hear me? The wind may scream to you, But it has no warmth for your heart, And I dearly want you back. Come back. Please hear me. Noble child, there is no world I have not made for you, But it is time you awake From this dream of sorrow. Hear me. Be where you have always been, Inside your resplendent star Where you remember who I am: The silence of your soul.
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09-05-2004, 11:33 PM | #2 |
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Just out of curiosity .... why has no one responded to this? Do I smell? *sniff sniff*
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09-06-2004, 03:17 AM | #3 |
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I don't attend this forum as often now as once.
I really like the feeling and emotion behind the poems. It is very strong and emphatic, and the words of the second one particularly seem to be a cry from the heart. It brings across more passion and sounds more poignancy then one normally attributes to God. That's a mistake I make all too readily. The experience you describe is like to another one I've heard of, of God opening people's ears so that they heard music. Extremely neat stuff . How long ago was the experience, if I might ask? What religion are you a member of? Good job on the fantasy novel writing. 77 pages is a large amount; I'm glad you stuck through to the end . I'm certain you're very pleased about that also .
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Thank you very much for the reply and the comments/compliments Lief.
My stay at the monastery was this year, I think at the beginning of the summer. It's a monastery in Hollywood (if you can believe that), which belongs to the Vedanta Society of Southern California (which in turn is a part of the Ramakrishna Order of India). Quote:
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Thanks again for the reply.
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Anyhow, if you would like to discuss this subject with me over email, I would be very interested to do so. Regards, Lief
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