~My Poem, "Vampire"

Giroth · 01-20-2005, 12:52 AM

Be easy on me, I'm not a real poet, lol Its basically about a vampire and his victim, a woman who can't even see his true nature.

He hides in the shadows,
like a predator stalking his prey.
His piercing eyes bear into your soul,
as if he could read your very thoughts.
He's dressed all in black; you all in white.
With his deceit he blinds you,
and with empty words he gains your trust.
Lies flow from his lips.
He's done all he has for this one moment,
To be alone with you in the dark.
His eyes focus on your pale neck,
with a thirst long unsatisfied.
As his moonlit silhouette slowly approaches you,
even now you cannot see his true heart,
even as he prepares to finish his deadly task.

Last Child of Ungoliant · 01-26-2005, 09:32 PM

He hides in the shadows,
like a predator stalking his prey.
His piercing eyes bear into your soul, how about 'bore' into your soul? don't know if eyes can bear!
as if he could read your very thoughts.
He's dressed all in black; you all in white.
With his deceit he blinds you,
and with empty words he gains your trust.
Lies flow from his lips.
He's done all he has for this one moment,
To be alone with you in the dark.
His eyes focus on your pale neck,
with a thirst long unsatisfied. with a long unsatisfied thirst?
As his moonlit silhouette slowly approaches you,
even now you cannot see his true heart,
even as he prepares to finish his deadly task.

very good, i like it

01-20-2005, 12:52 AM	#1
Giroth The Dragonqueen Join Date: May 2002 Location: sunny Cali! Posts: 423	~My Poem, "Vampire" Be easy on me, I'm not a real poet, lol Its basically about a vampire and his victim, a woman who can't even see his true nature. He hides in the shadows, like a predator stalking his prey. His piercing eyes bear into your soul, as if he could read your very thoughts. He's dressed all in black; you all in white. With his deceit he blinds you, and with empty words he gains your trust. Lies flow from his lips. He's done all he has for this one moment, To be alone with you in the dark. His eyes focus on your pale neck, with a thirst long unsatisfied. As his moonlit silhouette slowly approaches you, even now you cannot see his true heart, even as he prepares to finish his deadly task. __________________ Praise Father, Son and Holy Ghost 'So choose today whom you will serve..as for me and my family we wil serve the Lord.' " Now if you were a hot dog,and you were starving,would ya eat yourself? I know I would! First I'd smother myself in brown mustard and relish..I'd be so delicious!" It's pronounced 'Hether', not 'Heether', biznotch!

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01-26-2005, 09:32 PM	#2
Last Child of Ungoliant The Intermittent One Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: here and there Posts: 4,671	He hides in the shadows, like a predator stalking his prey. His piercing eyes bear into your soul, how about 'bore' into your soul? don't know if eyes can bear! as if he could read your very thoughts. He's dressed all in black; you all in white. With his deceit he blinds you, and with empty words he gains your trust. Lies flow from his lips. He's done all he has for this one moment, To be alone with you in the dark. His eyes focus on your pale neck, with a thirst long unsatisfied. with a long unsatisfied thirst? As his moonlit silhouette slowly approaches you, even now you cannot see his true heart, even as he prepares to finish his deadly task. very good, i like it