08-29-2007, 08:21 PM | #1 |
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Discussion for Hoofbeat Hill
I am only posting this story so that I can get some feedback on it. Please be as candid as you like. i really would like to know what you think.
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One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons |
08-30-2007, 11:35 AM | #2 |
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Oh wow. You hooked me on the opening line about small towns. I can tell right now this is going to be a good thriller. You've already got me asking questions. Like why did Alex and Tyler leave? Where is everybody? What is going on?
Btw don't answer that here Keep it up
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08-30-2007, 11:45 AM | #3 |
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Thanks a bunch. And yeah, all that is too be explained later. I dont know when I will be able to post there again for a couple of days, but I will continue.
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One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons |
08-30-2007, 11:05 PM | #4 |
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Whoa, man. This is getting pretty good. I gotta wonder wether Tasha's really seeing these things, or if she's just completely mental.
. . . You're not planning to pull a psychological thriller on us, are you? Don't you mess with me!!! I also love the way you described the noise she heard in your most recent post. It's the small details like that that make stories worth reading instead of watching the movie. It is possible, however, to go overboard with them. Trust me on that. |
08-30-2007, 11:20 PM | #5 |
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Thanks, T. I will use that advice, but I have already had a few stories shot down (then burned, flayed, and hung) because of too much of the little stuff. You'll know soon enough about her though, and Tyler and Alex, too.
It's coming. Get an umbrella.
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One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons |
09-01-2007, 12:40 PM | #6 |
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*holds an umbrella at the ready*
This is just getting better and better
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09-06-2007, 11:55 PM | #7 |
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The car has to be changed, man.
Or at least destroyed later on in the story. Other than that, I liked these new additions to the story. Especially Alex and Tyler's brotherly love thing you got going. It was pretty convincing (and got me to thinking 'bout me and my own brother... good times ). |
09-07-2007, 12:13 AM | #8 | |
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Thank you, thank you very much.
I really liked this new approach Im taking, Im trying to rveal bits and pieces of the twin's background story as they go along(
I hope you enjoy what I'll be posting over the next few days. If you dont keep up with your own story Im gonna gut a chevy right before your eyes. Oh, by the way, the car stays. I put it their just for you.
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One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons Last edited by Nautipus : 09-07-2007 at 03:34 PM. |
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09-08-2007, 12:23 PM | #9 |
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That was the funniest post yet. The brotherly bickering was just funny
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09-13-2007, 08:39 PM | #10 |
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The night grows silent...
Eerie. My friend, your skills are improving. |
09-13-2007, 09:09 PM | #11 |
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Why thank you, my pitiably land-locked friend.
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09-13-2007, 09:29 PM | #12 |
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Talk about your book, not me.
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09-13-2007, 09:45 PM | #13 |
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Better than you.
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09-16-2007, 04:27 PM | #14 |
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*shivers*Oooo. Creepy.
So the twins have guns. The question is: will they be useful later? I have been watching too many horror and thriller movies lately.
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09-16-2007, 06:47 PM | #15 |
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Well, this isnt going to be a typical horror story, just ask Tuinor . I usually try to draw from real life events, and then weave them with fictional myths or stories of my own design. So, whether or not the guns will be useful depends really upon your definition of it. I wont give anything away, but I will say that this particular story is heading down a road that I didnt think it would, this is after-all a seat-of-the-pants operation . I do have a bit of storyline mapped out, but for the most part.....well I just have a beggining, amiddle, and an end. We'll see how it goes.
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Yes you did. Right on my bed. I know it was you, I heard you laugh. You cant blame Snickers! And yes, Acalewia, we are good friends in rl. Anyway, I feel good about the beginning to chapter 3.
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Thankyou, for the agreementnessishingthing.
agreement
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