11-18-2007, 08:41 PM | #81 |
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Whoa, okay, there've been some new developements. The posts were executed very well, but i feel sorry for our heros, they never catch a break.
Oh, and Marcus' band.....they can suck it. Need I elaborate?
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11-18-2007, 09:43 PM | #82 |
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You need not elaborate. I get the picture.
The orginal handwritten version is 52 pages long. Just thought you wanted to know And thanks for all the feedback, Nautipus and Tunior.
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11-28-2007, 08:58 PM | #83 |
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I've posted an update. There's a little bit more before I end this story.
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11-28-2007, 09:07 PM | #84 |
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*prays*
please let Claudious survive, PLEASE!!!
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11-28-2007, 10:12 PM | #85 |
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Resorting to begging, are we?
What did you think of the post?
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11-28-2007, 10:24 PM | #86 | |
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Anyway, now that that's out of the way. Very well executed post. I still cant plumb how you can make a story flow so well, and make it fast at the same time. Damn you.
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11-28-2007, 10:42 PM | #87 |
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I promise you'll be able to giggle before the end
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11-28-2007, 10:57 PM | #88 |
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*In the most pitiful fashion he can muster* Thankyou....your a good person.
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12-03-2007, 02:16 PM | #89 |
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This from the person who damned me to hell a few posts ago I'll try to get a new post up either Wed or Thursday.
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12-06-2007, 09:30 PM | #90 |
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Oh, man. These posts are starting to get more heated! That's pretty neat how the Gifts are in the pendant. BTW, where do these gifts come from?
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12-06-2007, 10:16 PM | #91 |
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The Gifts in the Pendent? Or Gifts period?
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12-06-2007, 10:21 PM | #92 |
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The Gifts period.
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12-07-2007, 02:23 PM | #93 |
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I didn't menton where they came from in the story, because the characters are all used to the fact some have these Gifts and others don't. And none question it. But for those that aren't part of the story, they're inborn. Everyone born in or around Greenwood has it, but some, like Lark and Claudious, never develop it. The rest develop according to inner strength and spirit. Some are stronger the others, as you've prolly noticed by now.
This is also why outsiders call Greenwood Witchwood.
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12-09-2007, 08:13 PM | #94 |
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Updated the story. It'll prolly be sometime in the next three weeks before I get the next post up.
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12-09-2007, 08:18 PM | #95 |
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I see, and dont worry about the time, I'll be lucky if I get one of my own up before Christmas. Who are the two who've come to their aide? It couldnt be my main man, Claudious, could it?
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12-09-2007, 08:24 PM | #96 |
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I'm just gonna pull one of my stunts and make you wait and find out
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12-09-2007, 08:35 PM | #97 |
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Darn you.
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12-09-2007, 09:47 PM | #98 |
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Not bad. You really need to work on the formatting, it really gets hard when it comes to quotes, I can't tell who's speaking. Beyond that, the plot's decent. I like the idea of the Pendant, that's a cool concept. There were also a couple of interesting plot twists.
But I'd really like to see more character development. If you focused more on specific characters, instead of narrating what happened, it would work much better. It would also be cool if you didn't make some things quite as obvious or stated. If Ryman is distrusted by Claudious, you should show that in little ways.
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01-08-2008, 12:26 PM | #99 |
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Awwwww. Is that the end of the story? It was pretty good. It was definately a better ending than I thought might happen. Cant wait to see more of your stories.
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How did you think it would end? Well, we got email
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