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He he, hope to see Glorfindel back sometimes! *very subtle hint*
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But do you like the "Visitors" depiction of Glorfindel, or the LOTR depiction?
Actually - when I first conceived this story, I had read that Glorfindel may have returned to Middle-Earth in the Third Age, maybe arriving with Gandalf. Later - I read further that he had more likely come in the Second Age. But I held onto the "distance" I had decided to establish between him and the Human characters in the story. Although he's VERY friendly toward Aragorn in LOTR - he could either have made an exception with Aragorn, he could have changed somewhat over the intervening 2000 years - or he could have been drawn closer and closer to the line of Elendil, and held them in high regard (and maybe it started with Celepharn facing down Helkaruth). Of course... YOU could write a Glorfindel story!
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I feel ashamed, but I must admit that I don't remember a Glorfindel from the LOTR... so it was your version I liked. He seemed to me mysterious, with a lot of potential. Not sure what potential that would be though. A bit aloof, but not arrogant or "I couldn't care less".
For some reason my focus kept returning to him as it were, and not only to the main characters. Not sure how to explain it. :S Anyway, I've never finished a story in my life, so I don't see myself writing a good story. Plus, most stories I write are children stories. Ranging from 8 to 12 year olds. And I'm not original. Therefore it would not be a good idea for me to write about him
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He has a pretty small role - and in the movie it's expanded and given to Arwen. He meets Aragorn and the hobbits on their way to Rivendell and helps them get there. He's also at the Council of Elrond, but it's tough to keep track of which Elf is speaking between him, Erestor and Galdor. Or to even keep straight who those three are, especially your first few times through.
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I can hardly believe it, but I accidentally omitted something else I wanted to say in the story. I have added it in its proper place - near the end of Chapter 6 - and have left it bolded and italicized for now, so you who have already read can readily identify it.
I think I will try to write an "Author's Notes" for this little story of mine. Or would that totally spoil it?
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OK - I just removed the bold & italicization from the new quote.
I've also added an "Author's Notes" section on the end of the Chapter 7 post, if anyone would like to check it out.
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YAY!!!! You finished it! Very nice, Val--I only wish it was longer! *standing ovation* Great story, wonderful bringing out of the characters! I think the greatest achievement is your portrayal of Gandalf, which is, in my humble opinion, spot-on! Well done, my friend!
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Very extensive author notes, Val. On one hand I don't think they're really necessary to appreciate the story, on the other I always find it interesting to find out what and why the author inserted elements into a story. (I usually keep playing little tricks or puns in the choice of my characters' names but nobody ever seems to notice. Maybe I should consider author notes too. )
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Thank you both.
Yes - I was even unsure whether I should do the Author's Notes. I don't want to spoil it for those who DID notice the things I mentioned, or who might have realized them later. But... I decided it would help spell things out for those who are not so fully acquainted with all things Tolkien, or with the particulars about the northern Dunedain. Besides - I have a friend of the family who has just read my story... so someone in RL has read it! And... I'm planning to give a copy to a friend at a Tolkien Meetup group this coming Monday. It seemed like the notes might be especially helpful in these cases. But hey... JRRT gave lots of commentary.
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I enjoyed the story. Do write some of the 89 others as well - we crave good stories
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I, eh, retract my previous statement that the story was unfinished. For some reason I was completely convinced the story ended after Celepharn being nursed back to health and that the boar remained at large. Now that I've re-read I see I'm clearly mistaken. How could have forgotten all that?
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I retain my feeling of abruptness - but I see that you were talking about something that really was unfinished. A very different feeling.
Perhaps it's just that I was hoping for more?
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Varnafinde - thank you very much. Both for taking the time to read it and for the comments. I admit that the story needs some clean-up edits here and there. I recently re-read it, after having left it alone for a long time. I was surprised at a few typos - as well as some stylistic things I would change now. I don't think I read carefully over the notes - so I didn't notice that I left a sentence without a verb and with an unclosed parentheses. I probably did a sloppy edit to change a previous sentence and wasn't careful enough with it. So I'll need to give that a look.
Some of the wrap-ups: * Thane of Stonebows approaching: just indicates that Wand-Elf is having some early successes in trying to unite the estranged daughter kingdoms of Arnor. Of course, there are surely setbacks to follow, because they still have a rocky road for the next few hundred years. Also - I don't post this here at Entmoot, but I have written a history of the northern kings in an outline form - and indicate there that Celepharn marries a daughter of the Thane of Stonebows. We shouldn't look for the wedding anytime soon though - because Celepharn likely won't marry for another 50 or 55 years or so. His heir is born 58 years after this story is set. Yet - in another sense, this is just showing that things go on. The main part of this story is over, and life continues and changes. It also demonstrates a changed heart in King Beleg, who has perhaps 'warmed up' to the idea of reconciliations with the presence of Wand-Elf. * Helkaruth is indeed intended to be the cold drake who will eventually slay Dain. He may not have liked Glorfindel's words, but he took them to heart and stayed out of Eriador. But many years later, even that won't matter. Trust me, that is a story I want to tell, but I don't want to give it away in advance. Maybe I'll try to start it soon. Is that a good 'next'? I'm glad you liked that about Wand-Elf vaguely remember something about the future. That's how I imagine it might have been for him - having sung in the choir before time began about all these things that would come to pass. He might have re-sung snatches of the song for all the long years in Aman. Now that he has been confined permanently (more or less) to that human form, and is newly arrived in Middle Earth, he may - especially at first - struggle to piece things together and to recall them clearly. Maybe he remembers it imperfectly - at least at first. Or maybe it's that he is finally seeing before him what he has sung that was to be, and is uncertain (this being a new experience to some extent) whether he recognizes it. Did you notice he even seems baffled by the mention of 'snow'? Or maybe not baffled, but he might have to suddenly think about snow in new terms... in ways in which someone cloaked in mortality would think of snow, not as he would have previously thought of and remembered snow. Glad you enjoyed it.
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OK - I just corrected my note about the Princes.
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Thank you!
And that concept of Princes makes sense - Aragorn appoints Faramir to be Prince of Ithilien (as a principality under Gondor), and I guess that the Prince of Dol Amroth rules Dol Amroth as another prinicipality under Gondor. (It would be the same thing with Charles being Prince of Wales, with the difference that he's not expected to rule it His investment as the Prince of Wales took place when he had come of age, he had only been a Prince up till that time.) Quote:
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Don't get too excited, because I can be really... REALLY... slow!
But I've spent some time the past couple days outlining, setting up a timeline and making tentative chapter assignments for that next story. Like I say, it may be awhile before there's much more to tell than that.
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Links are in my sig. If you like those, I have just a little more posted at other sites but that I haven't cluttered Entmoot with - including an outline-type of document that chronicles all the Kings of the Northern Dunedain in the 3rd Age.
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