Teacup Café XXIX

[Nautipus]

Originally Posted by sisterandcousinandaunt

When is adze spelled az?

ooop. I ment Adz as opposed to Adze. Miscommunication on my part it seems.

*Glomps Sane and Lief*

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*Throws crab at Az*

[Tessar]

Hey, Azrael, you might consider posting your songs in the Writer's Workshop from now on, although I personally don't really have a problem with you using the teacup cafe for them every once in a while--if you plan to do it consistently though, you probably ought to use the writer's workshop .

I will say that the lyrics seem alright, except that you really seem to leap around a lot. There is a central theme, definitely, but I feel like you could do more to pull it together and be a bit more cohesive. You might run into a few problems because unless I'm reading it funny, I believe the meter/rhythm changes from paragraph to paragraph. Also unless you plan to chop it up into verse/chorus/bridge etc. sections then what you have is more a poem than a song.... assuming you plan to write it in a typical pop music style.

Many wonderful songs don't follow that style though. You might check out Loreena McKennitt if you're interested in a wonderful artist who doesn't always follow the typical verse/chorus/bridge style.

[Tessar]

Originally Posted by sisterandcousinandaunt

(aside)Midge, I know you're friends and all, but you're really pretty mean and belittling to Az.

Hey, no casting stones unless you're sinless.


Or a moderator. We get to do whatever we want. Within reason. And we get to decide what reason is.

Mwa-HAHAHAHAHAAHHAA!!!! *ominous thunder crash*

[Mari]

*dashes in to yell "Hi!" before taking off again* Busy day! No time to check back in later! Bye bye!

NB: Sis, hilarious image of the lama
Tess, you are cute ^_^ There is a box of change in the drawer if you are ever inneed of pennies

[sisterandcousinandaunt]

Originally Posted by Tessar

Hey, no casting stones unless you're sinless.

As the Great Robbie Burns says "Oh what a gift, a gift to gie us, to see ourselves as others see us."

I see the two of them saying to each other "When you do this it hurts my feelings..." and since they chose to do it in the middle of the Teacup, I'm weighing in with my opinion.

Cup of tea, anyone? Chocolate frog?

[Midge]

I didn't mean to be mean and belittling. I liked the words of the song. I was just proof-reading... maybe I snapped. It's not like all of us at the Moot bother typing perfectly... Sometimes I just want to go through and edit all your posts to be mechanically and grammatically correct.

So... sorry, Az, if you thought I was being mean. I wasn't. I saw it more as doing you a favor, fixing all the spelling mistakes for you and stuff.

[sisterandcousinandaunt]

Good, good, everyone happy.

now, what can I get you for brekker, Midge?

[Midge]

Guess what I already had? (hint: look at the post from yesterday around breakfast time)

[Midge]

However, now I might be ready for second breakfast.

[Azrael]

no she just likes to pull off the "shes smart then me" and it works

o midge I got my licence finally and im heading up now to get firworks for our 4th of july thing....lets blow stuff up!!!!!!

*looks at Mr.T* you can't avoid it the pizza cannon is right behind you..... live those golden days sir!

[Azrael]

Originally Posted by Tessar

Hey, Azrael, you might consider posting your songs in the Writer's Workshop from now on, although I personally don't really have a problem with you using the teacup cafe for them every once in a while--if you plan to do it consistently though, you probably ought to use the writer's workshop .

I will say that the lyrics seem alright, except that you really seem to leap around a lot. There is a central theme, definitely, but I feel like you could do more to pull it together and be a bit more cohesive. You might run into a few problems because unless I'm reading it funny, I believe the meter/rhythm changes from paragraph to paragraph. Also unless you plan to chop it up into verse/chorus/bridge etc. sections then what you have is more a poem than a song.... assuming you plan to write it in a typical pop music style.

Many wonderful songs don't follow that style though. You might check out Loreena McKennitt if you're interested in a wonderful artist who doesn't always follow the typical verse/chorus/bridge style.

believe it or not your right...and i did that on purposes. Its an acoustic/metal song, and on every paragraph it gets heavier and in the second one my metal petal comes in and on "eloi, eloi" it comes in full force. Plus the reason it seems like its jumping is He is looking back and the course is the present and the first part of the song is in the garden of olives....well must go get fireworks...brb its right down the road

[sisterandcousinandaunt]

Does anyone here live where shooting off fireworks is legal?

I have a huge amount, but one of my neighbors is a busybody.

[Lief Erikson]

Originally Posted by Midge

However, now I might be ready for second breakfast.

Lol!

Originally Posted by Azrael

believe it or not your right...and i did that on purposes. Its an acoustic/metal song, and on every paragraph it gets heavier and in the second one my metal petal comes in and on "eloi, eloi" it comes in full force. Plus the reason it seems like its jumping is He is looking back and the course is the present and the first part of the song is in the garden of olives....well must go get fireworks...brb its right down the road

I guess that to really understand how this works, I'd have to hear it.

Originally Posted by Nautipus

*Glomps Sane and Lief*

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*Stars buzz around head. Blinks, several times. Slowly recovers.*

[Azrael]

Yeah its legal at this time of the year but its always legal out in the country....why can't you shoot them off sis?

[Nautipus]

Originally Posted by Lief Erikson

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*Stars buzz around head. Blinks, several times. Slowly recovers.*

*Blitzes Lief as he recovers*




How goes it, me boy?


Legal here, too. We've had enough rain, so we it's okay.

[Curufin]

Argh, I hate cleaning house.

[Azrael]

im in the process of making sparkler bombs...wish i had M-60s to stuff in the middle....o well im going to let a little bit of starter fluid absorb into the sparklers so that as the fuse hits it blows up smoothly and with some force....Midge happy? I know your brother will be!

[sisterandcousinandaunt]

Well, not legal, lol. But the neighbors used to get together and do a little show in a local park. All grown-ups and the audience roped off and so forth, the kids had sparklers.

One of my neighbors is a fireworks guy... professional. So he's pretty tense on the subject of safety and he had it shut down.

I dunno. Fireworks are dangerous and people are stupid. But I think a few little fountains among friends shouldn't be a problem.

[Nautipus]

Actually, a friend and I got into a fireworks fight and we lit his hair on fire.


Yes, fireworks are dangerous.

Yes people are dumb.

[Lief Erikson]

Sounds like you'll have a glorious July 4th, Sis . Are you planning on any particularly good meals, too?

My head's in my stomach right now .

Originally Posted by Nautipus

*Blitzes Lief as he recovers*

Originally Posted by Nautipus

How goes it, me boy?

Oh, swell. Summer is super laid back, for me. A lot of lying down and closing your eyes in the heat, with mooting and reading in between the naps.

I'll probably get to go to the beach Thursday . That'll be fun. I love boogie-boarding.

How are you spending the summer? Beyond work, I mean (though what kind of job do you have?).

Originally Posted by Nautipus

Legal here, too. We've had enough rain, so we it's okay.

Are you going to shoot off fireworks for July 4th?

Originally Posted by Nautipus

Actually, a friend and I got into a fireworks fight and we lit his hair on fire.


Yes, fireworks are dangerous.

Yes people are dumb.

Lol!