09-23-2005, 09:08 AM | #301 |
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Hello to all! I wrote this little ditty to honor my friend's cat-with-an-attitude, Freddie (Yes, she's female -- long story about the name...)
I thought that some of you might enjoy it, especially the cat lovers in our midst! Dedication: To Sue’s cat Freddie, who takes every opportunity to remind us that it’s just so hard to be a kitty… Freddie Muses Upon Her Unfortunate Situation By Beruthiel's Cat It took a ruse involving food To get me in this crate! Now, cruising down the highway I Will curse my feckless fate! Off to the place that dreadful vet Now picks and pokes and prods… Nine pounds??? If I were bigger I’d Soon even up the odds! All this is for my good, he says – More like some sadists’ whim! But I have ways to wreak revenge… I’ll just throw up on him!
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11-07-2005, 07:11 PM | #302 |
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Raindrops
There is nothing as liberating as the cool autumn rain when the nights get longer and the winter sets in. I’m wandering, I’m travelling north feeling the rain on my face I want it closer, I want it near so I leave my estate as I pace. >>>>>It falls to the ground, >>>>>it makes me free. People are passing by as vague shadows but they can’t see me there is no time. Without my eyes all I can see is blurred lights from across the sea. My glasses are gone, my clothes are gone, my sanity is gone, but I’m not gone. For my body still feels (rain) my mind is busy ( ) my eyes are open (prime) my lungs still breathe (grime). , and I can’t see the key but I’m still entering , and I can’t find you I’m still listening , but I can’t hear your voice - I’m still lingering. , and the voices, the eyes, and the stars and the screams, the houses, the cars, and the blue TV-screens >>>>>everything is gone and I can’t see >>>>>if only the last lights would leave - >>>>>and there would only be me. I’m walking the paths from the sea back home and the people still pass me but keep their gaze low for naked I walk and naked I swim and naked I am when the rain hits my skin. , and if you would see me I still would be here , and if you would hear me my voice would still bear >>>>>but you can’t feel >>>>>and you can’t taste the rain I left me with. And in the dark of the night all I have is the rain and my skin. And I’m cold.
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11-13-2005, 07:27 PM | #303 |
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Heaven Sent
The Sun woke me up this morning rays of light in my face. - When will you stop the mourning, isn't it time to leave this place? Time to change direction, time is everywhere. Life is more than a reflection, your time in life is rare. So listen to the autumn rain, it tells you what to do. Lift your head up again, this rising Sun is new. So take your will and find your hope, life's a thrill for those who elope. I smiled for finally I was free to find the dreams I once deserted. I hate regret, I don't want to flee; now I'll let myself be diverted. And the Sun she went, but I still found my track for she is heaven sent, and she will be back..
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11-13-2005, 07:34 PM | #304 |
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That's quite pretty, Nerdanel! It sounds very much like lyrics to a song. You could be a songwriter; are you?
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11-13-2005, 07:41 PM | #305 |
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*smiles* Thank you, that's a very kind thing of you to say.. No, I'm not a songwriter. I'm still in the phase where I want to learn to write.
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11-13-2005, 07:46 PM | #306 |
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You already write! And write well, I must say. I'm still learning how to write, too, and I've been learning since I was three years old and will continue learning till the day I last lay down my pen. That's how it goes for every writer. You've got a talent, though, Nerdy - and yes, they look like songs, those last 2 poems. If you have any friends who play guitar, and like to compose their own music, it'd be fun to get together with them and put your words to someone's music, and see what happens.
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thanks for those words.. they mean a lot. it is true that writing is an ever ongoin process, and i'm glad so; nothing is constant.
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11-29-2005, 08:19 AM | #308 |
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I`ve been writing poems lately with alphabet theme- the titles start with A, B, C, etcetera. Whatever the first word to come to mind is I write a poem with that theme. It really helps me with inspiration. I thought I would post some of them here and see what you people thought. I`m skipping A thought because I don`t like it that much and it probably wouldn`t have much meaning to anyone but me. The form evolved on its own into what it is now- 9 short lines, not rhyming.
B- boredom Because my mind cannot stop cycling through fragments of thoughts. Because anywhere is better than here. Because the clock on the wall draws my wandering eye into its deathly cold grip. Can there ever be an end? ... Well that was lucky. One more second and I would have- C- calling In my chest I feel it, as if I were connected connected to it by spirit I can feel someone calling- I can feel the way I so long to see you that I invent fantasies of being called to by a strong emotion D- desire To long for someone long to see them to be by their side to touch them to do things that... To desire someone so much that you can`t hold back is somehow sickening E- eat Than bloody violence than lust and perversion it seems more pure. Than abandoned love or selfish anger another instinct innocent desire for food And so I add gluttony to my sins Constructive criticism welcome. There are a couple spots I was not happy with and I wonder if you can find them. If not, then they`re probably ok as is. |
12-01-2005, 02:41 PM | #309 |
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it's really very good!
the only parts i would work on would be in the "c" ( ) section where you say "i can feel someone calling- i can feel the way..." you should change "i can feel the way" cuz it sounds too much like "i can fell someone" also, where you just end a section with "sickening" maybe you could come up with something a bit more.. wordy/descriptive? i dunno. it still sounds awesome though
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12-01-2005, 02:56 PM | #310 |
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Contemplative Moment
It's a rare thing for someone who has lived so briefly to look back and wonder: would i do anything differently? Of course, the answer will always be yes. i would spout the truth like a fountain to anyone who would listen. would have laughed at those who thought me odd, pathetic in their boringness. most of all, i would have found the child that was me, hiding in the corner, and brought her out into the sunshine. i would have \enjoyed being a child, instead of trying desperatly to grow up. for now, i realize, i've missed that part. and while i have so much living to do yet, there is so much lving that i've seemed to have skipped over. ************************************************** To My Darkness, Whom I Once Loved You were once my anchor, something to depend on. You were once that which would never leave my side. You were once that which kept me from being alone. But have you noticed? I've been distant lately, and i've been thinking- Perhaps our ways should be parted. For now I'll be heading down paths where you just shouldn't follow. I've found someone else, a better rock for me; someone to be real when I begin to doubt existence. And, unlike you, this person asks nothing in return. He is my Light, who let's me see clearly. I no longer hide in you, but face things with him at my back. No longer will I fear the world, and slip away to you and weep; Instead I will face adversity, and my Light and I will laugh in its face.
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I like both of your poems, Lady.. The first one feels like a literal experiment: it has a really interesting rhythm and also a story behind it.
The second one is a bit more classic, and really nice. You express yourself really well.
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Just a little experiment..
Time We will know it all in time whatever it is we need to know, we will learn it all in time everything that makes us grow. But in the meantime let us not ignore advice, In the wintertime try to hear the breaking of the ice. If you'll meet me anytime I'll give myself to you, I will sacrifice a lifetime maybe even a few. So don't worry about time in the daytime or in the nighttime, don't use any time on longing for summertime. For as long as we have peacetime, there is only time to lose Choose yourself a bedtime when your head starts playing blues. Don't be alone at teatime share your dreams with friends Don't say you'll do it sometime: you won't notice when it ends.
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Here's a couple I wrote tonight.. Yesterday was Winter Solstice.
Luna You have the right to condemn, Beauty of the Night. Circle around them, Guide them with your cold light. They'll follow you blindly, they'll give you their trust. They'll lay their eyes on you fondly, give you their lust. Luna, the Moon in the Sky, watch them take their last breath. Look into their eye, as ignorance brings them Death. ________________________________ (no title) Rest yourself now, freeze for some seconds. Let your flowers bow, turn drops into diamonds. Winter has come now, with longer nights. The ground will oversnow, time for lunar sights. Nature, go to sleep, we need you by spring. Bury yourself deep, let go of the string. Take the Sun with you, but leave us the Moon. Forget all you knew, life will return soon.
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They're beautiful, Nerdanel! I always love your poetry.
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I love how us human beings give the moon our lust. And how ignorance brings them Death. I really enjoy your turns of phrase, a lot.
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Happy to hear that.
You can't navigate to the moon..
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Don’t be afraid to hurt me
If it makes you stay away Don’t hesitate to kill me If that would make your day. I’m here just to help you, To keep you company. You have been my taboo, Kill the nymphomany. Do what you find right, Force me to obey. Hunt me through the night, Let me be your prey. Do rip off the clothes I wear, They can aswell be sold. I don’t mind being bare, Just leave me in the cold. Don’t be afraid to cut me, I am but a heap of meat. Whatever you claim to be, I’ll still find you sweet.
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01-17-2006, 12:44 PM | #319 |
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nerd, beautiful as usual
i especially like luna. this last one you posted, i really like the third stanza. very cool
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thank you very much..
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