03-04-2008, 04:06 AM | #61 |
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I think you should IF it doesn't hurt the story to shorten it. But sofar I really enjoyed the story. It is accessible and fun. So whatever you do I certainly don't think you'll make a fool out of yourself by submitting it!
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03-05-2008, 05:37 PM | #62 |
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Word of advice, Tuinor: Only if it won't bring down the story or ruin it. I'll admit, I did that once for a story contest. Page limit was 5 pages. The story I had was over that. I had to cut all of the flashback scenes I had that added to the story. Reading back, I realize I hurt the story by cutting out parts. IF you think you can shorten it without harming the storyline, do it. It's really up to you.
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03-06-2008, 09:14 AM | #63 |
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Thank you all for the advice. Do not worry, I don't intend on ruining the story. In fact, I've decided not to enter "Sky Blue" at all, but another story I'm writing that focuses on one of my favorite characters in my main works. (Tuinor, who is my namesake here on the moot) If any of you have the time, I'd like to ask if you might help me out by reading it over and giving me some feedback if I post it in another Thread here in the Writers Workshop.
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03-07-2008, 02:02 PM | #64 |
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Love to! Any excuse to read.
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03-11-2008, 09:05 PM | #65 | |
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04-04-2008, 08:00 AM | #66 |
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Yay! Updatedness!
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04-15-2008, 12:50 PM | #67 |
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o_O Cliffhanger...
Which cloak is which? O_o The suspense...
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04-15-2008, 02:35 PM | #68 |
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04-15-2008, 02:38 PM | #69 | |
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Oh well, I guess it was a nice one, for a 3000th post
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04-15-2008, 07:40 PM | #70 |
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Very nice, T. Very nice indeed. Have fun with your tickle fight.
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04-23-2008, 06:27 PM | #71 |
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Eep! Cliffhanger! I love cliffhangers! I can guess who the first cloaked figure is but who the *bleep* is the second one? Who got Snow? Ahh, the suspense! I love it
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06-23-2008, 12:28 PM | #72 |
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Um, Tunior? You do realize you have a triple post, right?
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07-18-2008, 09:19 PM | #73 |
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I did not! I haven't been able to get on very recently (my computer came down with a virus) and so I haven't been able to check it! Is there anyway I or a mod could delete them, please? |
04-15-2009, 10:25 PM | #74 |
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Yay! Update!
Oh ****! This dude if freakin wicked! Its awesome! Great post!
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10-11-2009, 12:34 AM | #75 |
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Oooo. Badass bad guy. HAHA! And he thought he was untouchable. HAHA!
<.< >.> I love how you keep the readers guessing. I love that about stories. Keep it up.
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10-30-2009, 08:54 PM | #76 |
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*whistles* Nice one, T-bone. There's alot going on under the skin of this story. Awesomness.
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06-23-2011, 10:35 PM | #77 |
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I havnt thought of this story in a long time. You still working on it, T?
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06-23-2011, 10:46 PM | #78 |
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I was just a-thinking of picking it back up. It's good to see you back here on the moot. Haha, as if I've been around all this time
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06-23-2011, 11:16 PM | #79 |
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Haha, no kidding. Unfortunately, RL is a demanding place. Btw, I'm working on a little short story again. I've put some major time into this one. What's your emai, again?
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