Summary

Elfmaster XK · 08-24-2003, 05:47 AM

I wondered if anyone would be willing to help me with my summary, and indeed if anyone else has trouble with summaries. I have written it, but am not sure if it is interesting to the reader. Being the writer, it's difficult for me to judge if this will engage interest or not, because I already know what comes of it, so I thought I'd post it and see if I could get a general opinion. My story focuses on political instability between religious sects, and society and women's role therein. So here's the summary.

“Down with the Guild system!” the banners of The Unified Church read. The Union has managed to spread across Narella, the Western world, but the elves have long relied on the system of clans and guilds to keep their freedom. They are not about to give it up, especially not for *their* kind. Jaira De Morette, an elf of high status, has had little to worry about during her short life, but that is all to change when the Union arrive in the elven city of Goldleaf Lakes. Friends and family start disappearing, the power hungry Unified Church destroy more and more of the old way of life, and a much more sinister purpose is working all the time where she would least expect to see it. Jaira has to fight for her love, freedom, and life as all around her the echelons of power and society dissolve into chaos and disorder. The old ways are being destroyed, and she must realise status and power can no longer win her what she desires.

Lizra · 08-24-2003, 10:25 PM

It still seems a bit mysterious to me, but I can be rather dense!

The combination of Elves and church throws me a little, but you have done a nice job. Maybe one or two more line about what kind of "changes".

Elfmaster XK · 08-25-2003, 05:26 AM

That's something I hadn't considered. I should probably rename the Church because they are a religious group, but I don't mean them to be the same as say, the Catholic Church, because this is a different world.

Thanks Lizra, I shall work on it.

Fimbrethil · 09-20-2003, 06:28 PM

EEK! That's what confused me the first time. It sounds like a good enough book(not really my style that's why I say good enough) but the summary doesn't really grab me. Is this a thread just for your summary or others peoples too?

08-24-2003, 05:47 AM	#1
Elfmaster XK Possessive Villain Fancier Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: On my ship, riding the waves YARR! Posts: 2,008	Summary I wondered if anyone would be willing to help me with my summary, and indeed if anyone else has trouble with summaries. I have written it, but am not sure if it is interesting to the reader. Being the writer, it's difficult for me to judge if this will engage interest or not, because I already know what comes of it, so I thought I'd post it and see if I could get a general opinion. My story focuses on political instability between religious sects, and society and women's role therein. So here's the summary. “Down with the Guild system!” the banners of The Unified Church read. The Union has managed to spread across Narella, the Western world, but the elves have long relied on the system of clans and guilds to keep their freedom. They are not about to give it up, especially not for their kind. Jaira De Morette, an elf of high status, has had little to worry about during her short life, but that is all to change when the Union arrive in the elven city of Goldleaf Lakes. Friends and family start disappearing, the power hungry Unified Church destroy more and more of the old way of life, and a much more sinister purpose is working all the time where she would least expect to see it. Jaira has to fight for her love, freedom, and life as all around her the echelons of power and society dissolve into chaos and disorder. The old ways are being destroyed, and she must realise status and power can no longer win her what she desires. __________________ My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies, Fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly - my friends. XK

08-24-2003, 10:25 PM	#2
Lizra Domesticated Swing Babe Join Date: May 2002 Location: Reality Posts: 5,340	It still seems a bit mysterious to me, but I can be rather dense! The combination of Elves and church throws me a little, but you have done a nice job. Maybe one or two more line about what kind of "changes". __________________ Happy Atheist Go Democrats!

08-25-2003, 05:26 AM	#3
Elfmaster XK Possessive Villain Fancier Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: On my ship, riding the waves YARR! Posts: 2,008	That's something I hadn't considered. I should probably rename the Church because they are a religious group, but I don't mean them to be the same as say, the Catholic Church, because this is a different world. Thanks Lizra, I shall work on it. __________________ My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies, Fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly - my friends. XK

09-20-2003, 06:28 PM	#4
Fimbrethil My microwave speaks to me Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Having conversations with my major household appliances. Posts: 937	EEK! That's what confused me the first time. It sounds like a good enough book(not really my style that's why I say good enough) but the summary doesn't really grab me. Is this a thread just for your summary or others peoples too? __________________ Bah, Bah black sheep have oyu any wool? Yes sir, yes sir. Three bags full! One for the master, one for the dame, one for the little boy who lives down the lane! Bah, bah black sheep have you any wool? Yes sir, yes sir. Three bags full. I'll be gone for a while. But never fear! "I shall return anon!"

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