The Keepers

***Earniel*** · 03-27-2005, 01:24 PM

A small nitpick: I wonder at the use of the girls' nicknames: Wags, Buck and Tal. Not only does the origin of the names remain unexplained but the names themselves are only used once in the whole part. Instead you use, even in the narration, other nicknames that are derived from the girls' proper names, like Eccy or Cat. Wouldn't it be much easier to forgo the first set of unused nicknames altogether?

03-27-2005, 01:24 PM	#1
*Earniel* The Chocoholic Sea Elf Administrator Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: N?n in Eilph (Belgium) Posts: 14,363	A small nitpick: I wonder at the use of the girls' nicknames: Wags, Buck and Tal. Not only does the origin of the names remain unexplained but the names themselves are only used once in the whole part. Instead you use, even in the narration, other nicknames that are derived from the girls' proper names, like Eccy or Cat. Wouldn't it be much easier to forgo the first set of unused nicknames altogether? __________________ We are not things.

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