09-23-2005, 09:36 PM | #1 |
Hobbit
Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: Georgia
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Comments on my poems plz
i would appreciate any comments on these poems!!!
Suicidal Rose Sees the sky Prays to die Or to see Another way free Holds the knife Says bye to life Beside a rose bud Soiled with blood A small cry No way to lie Time to die Just say bye Take the rose Hold it close Think of me I'll be free Nothing's Wrong Nothing's wrong But nothing's right In this night I don't belong Dwelling on fears Left to cry And wonder why I'm still here Let myself fall All are gone Left all alone None to call Can't leave behing What's been done Nowhere to run No peace to find
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