10-25-2004, 02:57 PM | #11 | ||
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Great poem! It really grabbed my attention.
Hm... about the last verse, maybe: I can't help but wonder: is their deep bluen seen as friendly pools? or cold,harsh ice? Or something? I wrote a poem for my brother as a thank you for the belated birthday gift he sent me. I'd love to know what you think. It's hopefully a bit humorous. (He sent me a poem for my card.) Here's a short peom for my bro Whose rhyming musings I did know Parcels! Parcels! Exciting stuff One can never have enough. Lovely bracelet, socks so warm Books to weather any storm Tasty soy nuts go down fine With Finnish beer or Swedish wine. So tack så mycket(1) for the gift It will not cause a sybling rift It was welcome, you should know Over here in Umeå And with that I'll say hejdå(2)! Swedish translations: (1) Thank you very much (2) Goodbye Pronounciation guide (aka see, my poem does so rhyme ): (1) Tack so muka (2) Hey doh
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