06-21-2006, 06:40 PM | #1 | |
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Trying a mystery/comidy story
Okay, in another thread here I nodiced that nobody here makes mystery storys so here I go, it uses somewhat genaric (If I'm useing the term correctly) caricters.
I'm also includeing some comic elements as I don't think I could keep a dramadic thing. And it's in more of a script form. Here I go... __________________ (Seting:Interior, the parlor, night. The butler, the maid and the cook are there, the cook is eating potato chips) Cook:Anyone want some chips? Butler:I'm too nervous. Maid:Me too. (The maid has a rushen actcent) Butler:Mr. John is late, Decectives shouldn't be late... (The decective (Mr. John) and a police officer come in) Decective:Hello, my name is Decective John J. John- Maid:We know that! Why are we here?!? (The decective looks annoyed) Decective:...And this is officer Smith. Officer Smith:Hello! (Officer Smith waves, The decective looks annoyed) Decective:And we are here becaulse... (Lightning strikes) Decective:The Duke of Argule has been murdered! (Lightning strikes again) Decective:But the murderer was clever and we must figure out how and were he was murdered! (Lightning strikes yet again) Cook:Yay! It's like a game of clue! (The decective looks annoyed) Decective:First we must examine the body! Officer? (Officer Smith rolls a little cart with a body on it) Decective:Were is the wound? Officer Smith:On his head. Decective:Okay... Let's look at it. (They uncover the head and it's got bullet hole in it) Decective:What do you subose killed him? Officer Smith:Well we found this at the crime sceen. (Officer Smith holds up a very dirty gun) Decective:Hmm... It seems to have blood on it... (The cook looks sick) Decective:Now to figure out were he was murdered! Officer Smith:Well we found him in the librery. Decective:On we go! (They all go to the librery) Officer Smith:Here's were we found him. (Officer Smith points to a chalk outline and an icky stain) Cook:Ew... Decective:Useing my awesome powers of deduction I deduct that this is were he was killed! (Everyone aplades) Officer Smith:How does he do it? Decective:Now to figure out who killed him! (Lightning strikes yet another time) Decective:Now the reson why you're here! (The decective points at the Butler, the cook, and the maid.) Maid:But shurely you don't think I did it! Decective:Back to the body! Cook:But I gotta go to the bathroom! Decective:Okay, but meet us at the body! (Later, they're all in the parlor) Butler:How did the cook beat us here? Decective:That, my friend is a mystery for another day... now officer, do you have the cloaths the duke of Argule was wereing when he was killed? Officer Smith:They're still on him. Decective:Oh. (They uncover the body, the duke is wereing a nice suit) Decective:Look! A white thread! Now all we have to do it figure out who's wereing white! (He looks up, the butler, the maid, and the cook are all wereing white) Officer Smith:I just thought of something, the gun was stained, and all the suspects are wereing white so wouldn't the person have stained cloathing? Decective:Hmmm... (The cook's wereing stained cloathing) Decective:Aha! You did it! Cook:But I handle raw meat all the time! Decective:And yet you were so grossed out by the blood! Cook:Allright you cought me! Decective:Another case solved by Decective John J. John! Butler:And the butler didn't even do it! The End. __________________ P.S. You can post coments now, they would be very welcome
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