07-10-2007, 11:13 AM | #21 |
Leaf-Crowned Lord Of Elvenpath
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Well... A nice story. But I didn´t completely understand it. You really should have put dots after the characters´ phrases. And you could´ve pictured the environment more. Otherwisse, well written.
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07-24-2007, 10:35 AM | #22 |
Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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It had been a month since Nadia's return when Lei approached her in the marketplace.
"I'd say good day but then I would be lying," "What is it, Lei?" "Aya's missing and Charles can't seem to find her. Do you think she went back to the Hold?" She frowned at him. Out of habit she looked down at his hand. A dragon with wings outspread was on his palm and he was holding his hand where she could see it. Only Masters and Maidens could see each others marks. Lei was a DragonMaster. "No, I think there is one other place she would have gone," Moments later, She reached the towns cementary. And as she expected, Nadia found Aya knelt in front of one of the graves. "You know, you have everyone worried, Aya," "I know," she whispered. Nadia glanced at the name on the headstone. Then she stared at it. "Nadia?" "Was this your father?" "Yes why?" Nadia touched the headstone. "This was my brother," Aya blinked. "Then you're my...my..." Nadia nodded. "Your aunt," she rose and hugged Nadia. "I'm going to go back to the Hold. They need Maidens," her aunt took her hand. "On your palm is a dragon with outspread wings. Only Masters and Maidens can see it on one another, but you cannot see your own. Do as I did when you return to the Hold. They will welcome you," "Thank you, Nadia. For everything," Later that night, Lavish told her family she had an announcement to make. "I've decided to become a DragonMaiden," "What?" Jasper nearly choked on his drink. "Why?" "We can't stop her, my husband. She has the heart of a dragon," jasper gave his wife a puzzled look. Lavish saw the dragon on Nadia's palm. "I must go," "No!" "Jasper, she will go sooner or later. Eventually you will have to let her go," He frowned. Nadia spoke sense, but it didn't mean he had to do it willingly. "Is this what you want, Lavish?" "Yes," "Then I will not stop you,"
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