song i wrote

[durinsbane2244]

a song a wrote, yay!:
[sounds incredibly better sung with guitar]

Dance With Death

Since the day, that jealousy arrived,
Many souls, have battles til they've died.
When it came, it brought a call to war.
Never once, had any fought before,
An open door.

See them come, the Warriors of Light.
Watch them fall, conquered by Night.
Some men stayed, to take a final chance.
No one came, back from their dance,
A fighting trance.

Meadows turned to battlefields,
And rivers running red.
The sky alight with cannon fire,
And strangers falling dead.

Rolling plains and grassy fields,
Turned into a makeshift grave.
Dirty roads and broken dreams,
All that's left of those who're saved.

Soldiers went, to answer to the call.
Weapons drawn, the odds were tall.
Rebel souls, they fought because they must.
Deserters all, fell to the dust,
No binds of trust.

Can't you see what's come to us,
Because of what we've done?
Can't you see the red horizon,
Bloodstains on the setting sun?

Can't you hear the crys of solders,
Fighting for a broken cause?
Can't you hear the screaming people,
Following the broken laws?

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comments?

[Curubethion]

Not bad...for a Yankee! It's pretty good. But doesn't this belong in the Lyrics 1 thread?

[durinsbane2244]

well, you see, that thread [i believe, could be, and probly am, wrong] was meant for the posters song, so i did the same! not bad thinkin, for a self-proclaimed idiot cowboy, er, red sock. . .

[hectorberlioz]

pretty good rhyming in there

[Curubethion]

Originally Posted by durinsbane2244

not bad thinkin, for a self-proclaimed idiot cowboy, er, red sock. . .

Not idiot cowboy...only Idiot.
If this thread doesn't close, I might as well post lyrics too (or is this some kind of Evil Empire exclusion thing? )

Catapult
Skiing down the slippery slope
Of shattered hopes.
Living in the fast lane,
Life won't be the same.
She went up top,
Couldn't ever stop
The hi's, then lies and goodbyes
Down the road...

[Chorus]:
WHY DID IT START?
HOW DID IT START?
WHEN WILL IT STOP?
A catapult that goes on and on.
She sees You,
She needs You-
Why won't she call?

A leads to B to C to D again;
Someday it's gonna stop,
But who knows when?
She sees her mistake,
But she's gonna fall.
She's going to the edge-
How far to lose it all?

[Chorus]

Bridge:
Sometimes we don't know how to stop.
Speeding reckless, can't see light above.
We've got to reach out, hold it...

[Chorus]

[durinsbane2244]

THE COMPOSER LIKES THE RHYMING!!!AAAHHH![in heaven]

hm, no evil empire exclusion, as for how, if you play guitar:

its sung mostly to the tune of bad company's song, bad company,

Am
since the day
C
that jealousy
E
arrived

and so on, for the end of the verse just go back to Am for the last bit, you can feel for it.

for the other verses in there,

G D
Meadows turned to battlefields,
C Am
and rivers running red.

and so forth, than there's some cool sounding stummin in between the verses i can't write out, but if i record it and get it on my comp for me other forum, i will most certainly put it here too. . .

[jellyfishannah]

Originally Posted by durinsbane2244

THE COMPOSER LIKES THE RHYMING!!!AAAHHH![in heaven]

hm, no evil empire exclusion, as for how, if you play guitar:

its sung mostly to the tune of bad company's song, bad company,

Am
since the day
C
that jealousy
E
arrived

and so on, for the end of the verse just go back to Am for the last bit, you can feel for it.

for the other verses in there,

G D
Meadows turned to battlefields,
C Am
and rivers running red.

and so forth, than there's some cool sounding stummin in between the verses i can't write out, but if i record it and get it on my comp for me other forum, i will most certainly put it here too. . .

Very cool! I'll have to try that. I promise I won't steal it.

[jellyfishannah]

Originally Posted by durinsbane2244

a song a wrote, yay!:
[sounds incredibly better sung with guitar]

Dance With Death

Since the day, that jealousy arrived,
Many souls, have battles til they've died.
When it came, it brought a call to war.
Never once, had any fought before,
An open door.

See them come, the Warriors of Light.
Watch them fall, conquered by Night.
Some men stayed, to take a final chance.
No one came, back from their dance,
A fighting trance.

Meadows turned to battlefields,
And rivers running red.
The sky alight with cannon fire,
And strangers falling dead.

Rolling plains and grassy fields,
Turned into a makeshift grave.
Dirty roads and broken dreams,
All that's left of those who're saved.

Soldiers went, to answer to the call.
Weapons drawn, the odds were tall.
Rebel souls, they fought because they must.
Deserters all, fell to the dust,
No binds of trust.

Can't you see what's come to us,
Because of what we've done?
Can't you see the red horizon,
Bloodstains on the setting sun?

Can't you hear the crys of solders,
Fighting for a broken cause?
Can't you hear the screaming people,
Following the broken laws?

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comments?

That's great! How do you play it?